A Language of Feelings

“Morning Sky”. Image by Erlyn Olivia.

Paradise comes to us in many forms
Mine came as a morning bliss
Knocking bad dreams away

The sun kissed my eyes softly to open
Stunned by the display in sky
I'm lost in a deep awe

A paradise moment is lost in words
It’s a language of feelings 
Tuck 'em well in your heart


Poem is written in KIMO, which is an Israeli form of syllabic poetry, written in 3 lines with 10/7/6 syllable counts. Kimo poems often focus on a static image, a single moment in which there is no movement. Along with its brief nature, this makes it an excellent form to reflect on or celebrate a particular instance. There is no rules on rhyme or certain amount of stanza in Kimo. I just happened to write mine above in 3 stanzas.

Eugi’s Weekly Prompt Challenge May 6, 2021 – with Paradise as a prompt

20 Comments

  1. Dora says:

    Erlyn,
    I love this Kimo form. Thank you for your beautiful introduction to it. All the tactile imagery works so well in this moment of awakening, and that last stanza”s dictum re. “the paradise moment” is full of light & wisdom..
    ~🕊Dora

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    1. Erlyn Olivia says:

      Thank you very much for your comment, Dora. I appreciate it. 😊

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  2. -Eugenia says:

    Beautifully written piece, Erlyn, and I love the poetry form. Your last stanza rings true.

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    1. Erlyn Olivia says:

      Thank you, Eugi. I appreciate your comment as always. 😊

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      1. -Eugenia says:

        My pleasure, Erlyn!😊

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  3. utahan15 says:

    nice pleasant imageries

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  4. earthskyair says:

    Such beautiful and true words in your poetry! And the image is simply stunning!

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    1. Erlyn Olivia says:

      Thank you very much. Appreciate your words.

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  5. judeitakali says:

    Beautiful and honest.

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    1. Erlyn Olivia says:

      Thank you, Jude.

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      1. judeitakali says:

        My pleasure. 🍁

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  6. Thanks for sharing. This is the first Kimo I’ve read. Yours is lovely.

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    1. Erlyn Olivia says:

      Thank you, Ruth. I’m trying to experience new forms of poem whenever I feel adventurous 🙂

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      1. I need to do different forms too! well done!!

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  7. gdutta17 says:

    What a beautiful poem, made even more beautiful by the atnning pics. Thank you for introducing me to the KIMO form of poetry. Looks certainly interesting as it provides a little more leeway for poets to describe; because it has more syllables than the Haiku/senryu.
    Loved this.

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    1. Erlyn Olivia says:

      You are welcome, Goutam. Thank you for your kind words too.

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